My Perfect Holiday!

WALT:  create a piece of narrative writing using descriptive language.

 

Instructions: You are going to create a narrative about a perfect holiday that you would like to have with your family. You can go anywhere in the world that you like, this can be as imaginative as you like.

 

Planning

Who are the main characters?
Where is your family going on holiday?
What is one activity that you are going to do on your holiday?
What is another activity that you are going to do on your holiday?
Beginning
Middle
End

 

Start writing here:

→ in my holiday me and my family went to Austra to see my casein, in australia 

    We went on a plane it was and 8 hor flat we got of the plane, we took a car

     To my auntie house we got same food on the way to my auntie ,house 

      Win we got to my auntie house we went to sleep for a little bit and then

      We woke up and then i play with my little casein we wore playing tag

       We sat down on the coat we wore watching tv with m little casein

        We went in to the car so we can get same food we went to 

         Tow to go get same food and so we can get same shoe 

          For me and my little casein went to the show shop and

          Got same show and then we went to go get same food

And we went sleep

  

         

          

Capital Letters

 

Jamie has written a letter to his friend Hoani.  Read the letter carefully as Jamie has forgotten to use capital letters.  Put capital letters where Jamie should have put them. 

 

7 harehuka drive elsdon 12 january 2002 dear hoani I have really enjoyed living in Wellington since june.  I have made some friends at my new school, which is Rata School on Paremata street.  My teacher is Mrs rapana.  She is all right.  In our classroom we have a pet mouse called mr snow.  It is my job to clean the mouse house on tuesdays. We have visited lots of interesting places like the museum, te papa.  I went to see rugby at the Westpac Trust stadium in september.  It was awesome to see Jonah charge down the field. I am still playing rugby.  i play for the norths rugby club now.  We train on wednesdays.  My new friend Callum is in my team too. Would you like to come and stay with us during the next holidays?  I hope you will.  say hi to all my old friends, especially to everyone at whenuapai rugby club. Your friend jamie

 

language.

 

When people read this recount they should feel interested and excited.

 

Plan of my paragraph topics: Use the right side to add in your planning

1. Introduction 3 sentences Orientates and hooks Makes the reader want to keep reading	Who: Duffy, Team 4 and Team 5 What: Duffy Assembly Where: School hall When: Friday afternoon Why: To have fun and to learn about Duffy’s adventures.
2. Body Paragraph 1 3-4 sentences What happened at the beginning of Duffy’s journey?	Duffy was at home and Stuffy came to visit.  Duffy found stuffy a bit annoying and Stuffy couldn’t sleep
3. Body Paragraph 2 3-4 sentences What happened to Duffy when he was in space?	Duffy found a worm hole and went into space and got stuck there.  Duff-Zip and Stuff-Zip were there  They had an adventure
4. Body Paragraph 3 3-4 sentences How did the Duffy performance end? Did Duffy make it back?	Duffy made it back to his room and his book was fixed.
5. Conclusion 2-3 sentences Summarising the main points and sharing how you felt during the performance.	I felt happy because the performance was really great.

 

Start Writing here

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On a windy Friday afternoon at Pt England School Team 4 and Team 5 went to the  hall to go see the  

 

A show first duffy came back from school and then he put his bag down on the table and the he look at has space book 

 

And then his dad came in the room and he said that they wore going to have pizza for dinner and his dad said to duffy the your little cousin is here and then Stuff came in to say hi to his cousin 

 

And then  they look at the stars and then duffy dad said that  dinner was here and they went to dinner 

And then when they went back to there room And the Stuff cod not sleep And the  Stuff came to duffy room and sleep in duffy room And then duffy wok up and saw a black hole And went thro it and then

 

He saw Duff-Zip and  Stuff-Zip and got duffy home.